Not So Stunning Sentences
Here's an ironic little book advertisment I found at Amazon:
The en-dash is plain wrong (I'm certain the author would've used an em-dash), and a comma (or em-dash) is missing after the first 'or two' and I'd favour a hyphen in 'closely-related' (just personal preference there). But ouch! that elipsis sure saps the sentence of any residual Stun.
And even then, the sentence is particularly UN-STUNNING.
Here is the original:
While here is a far more STUNNING version:
Stunned? I know I am. Here's how I'd continue:
See that? I'm telling a story and demonstrating it all at once. Then I'd finish like this:
Pow! Whammo! Stun Plus Plus!
I've really gotta write a book on grammmer, one o' these days.Next → ← Previous
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